Haiku Experiment Two
Neil Cohn offered some helpful comments on my first comics haiku experiment from last week. He suggested a form with more panels but varying the amount of entities in the panel (using his Lexical Representation Matrix from this article (pdf)). This better codifies some of the things I was thinking about as far as panel content, so I adapted his suggestion a bit to make it more concise.
This second experiment using 5 panels in three strips. The top tier has two panels which are a micro and mono panel, respectively–that is the first panel focuses on part of an entity, while the second focuses on one entity. The middle tier is one long panel that is a macro, showing multiple entities. The bottom tier repeats the structure of the top tier except in reverse: mono, micro, to accomodate my penchant for symmetry.
This experiment again takes some liberties with haiku thematics. After rewatching the noir Gilda with its wonderful carnival scene, I decided to put that into the piece, as carnival (Mardi Gras and such) is in itself a kind of micro-season. Click the image above to see the comic.
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